User blog comment:Meiaikawa13/Yakusoku no Kizuna (second stanza?)/@comment-124.168.69.197-20140118050515

Great effort! :)

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Here are my suggestions:

"Taisetsu na uta gatta" sounds more right than "Daisetsuna kuta daratta"

"Kowaku nanka" instead of "Kowanka nanka"

"Omajinai" instead of "onajinai"


 * It should be 'destiny' instead of 'tesei' as the last word.